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    Could somebody look this over proof read for me please?
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  • #2
    these are from the 1st pdf:
    ......owntown Doggie is a professional home-based dog grooming salon serving the Greenville, Taylors and Greer, SC area<<<<< you need a S on the end of area

    Kennel free environment that allows the pet to play or relax in a secure salon.
    Extensive research
    Revealed that the more
    comfortable the dog is,
    the easier and<<<<<,,,, Kennel and Revealed are caps , but not the beginning of a sentence

    That is why i am so happy to provide<<<< you need to Cap the I

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    • #3
      First of all, that is a beautiful, top notch brochure !!

      Here are a couple of grammar errors that I saw:

      After “extensive research", you have capitalized the “R” in revealed.

      In the section “about Gayle” two different “I” are in lower case.

      In the section “Haircuts starting at” $13…..NO WAY, that certainly is a mistake. Groomers do just nails for more that that.

      Happy Brochure mailing

      Dolly’s Barking Bubbles, LLC

      www.dollysbarkingbubbles.com

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      • #4
        [QUOTE=Dolly;378918]First of all, that is a beautiful, top notch brochure !!

        In the section “Haircuts starting at” $13…..NO WAY, that certainly is a mistake. Groomers do just nails for more that that.




        I thought she had all the services broke down into each individual service. For instance I thought if the bath was $30 then you add the haircut for $13 to get $43. If I am right then you might have to be more clear about that because you'd hate for clients to think they're going to only pay $13 for a grooming. I will have to agree that it's a beautiful brochure. Good job!
        ~*~Robin~*~
        "In a perfect world, every dog would have a home and every home would have a dog."

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        • #5
          Originally posted by RudyRoo View Post
          these are from the 1st pdf:
          ......owntown Doggie is a professional home-based dog grooming salon serving the Greenville, Taylors and Greer, SC area<<<<< you need a S on the end of area
          Because of the "the" at the beginning, area doesn't need to be pluralized. The cities are adjectives, otherwise it's just "The area."

          On the second page:

          "By using only top quality...." The sentence can be an easier read if you re-worded it like "Our clients notice the difference when we use top quality, earth-friendly PH balanced products!"

          I don't think having the text surrounded by the * should be in the center of that page. I also notice you put * in certain spots where they probably aren't needed. It makes more sense to put that text in ( ) rather than *, because it's implying to look somewhere else for more detailed information.

          Under Services: "Hair removal for breeds that require (it or this service inserted here).

          Is "Because Shed Happens" a trademarked phrase from the FURminator company?

          "Three options for completion pick up time" has an extra L in it after completion.

          "Your pet is welcome to hong out with us & ploy" should be hang out with us and play. Loved upon sounds funny.

          "Lost pickup time is 5:30" should be last.

          It looks like a great brochure!

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          • #6
            imo i would not list the bath and haircuts as a seperate thing just because someone could (and it does happen all the time) call and say they want "just a haircut" because i gave fido a bath at home so that will only be $15.00 according to your brochure i would say something like "a complete groom includes ..........." then you could offer just a bath service for .......$$$$$$ keep in mind that people will try to take advantage of this "just a bath thingie" i tell them when they call with a short coated dog and all they want is "just a bath" that i only do "j.a.b." for regularly maintained pets that come in at least once a month, example, when a lab is booked and they say they want jab i tell them what my price is AND what is covers (nails,ears,glands,bath,deshedding) they then realize it IS NOT j.a.b. and i have no problem with getting my prices i also prefer NOT to put any prices on my brochures just in case i need to change them out.
            Last edited by july; 01-08-10, 11:32 AM.

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            • #7
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              Wow! Thanks so much for your taking the time to proof for me! I sure did make some errors that need correcting! Yes I meant for the haircut to be in addition to the bath, which having pointed out to me that people can missunderstand & take advantage, etc is a can of worms I do not want opened! Thanks again!

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