New Brochure

[downtowndog]

Could somebody look this over proof read for me please?

[RudyRoo]

these are from the 1st pdf:
......owntown Doggie is a professional home-based dog grooming salon serving the Greenville, Taylors and Greer, SC area<<<<< you need a S on the end of area

Kennel free environment that allows the pet to play or relax in a secure salon.
Extensive research
Revealed that the more
comfortable the dog is,
the easier and<<<<<,,,, Kennel and Revealed are caps , but not the beginning of a sentence

That is why i am so happy to provide<<<< you need to Cap the I

[Dolly]

First of all, that is a beautiful, top notch brochure !!

Here are a couple of grammar errors that I saw:

After “extensive research", you have capitalized the “R” in revealed.

In the section “about Gayle” two different “I” are in lower case.

In the section “Haircuts starting at” $13…..NO WAY, that certainly is a mistake. Groomers do just nails for more that that.

Happy Brochure mailing

Dolly’s Barking Bubbles, LLC

https://www.dollysbarkingbubbles.com

[SharPeiMom]

[QUOTE=Dolly;378918]First of all, that is a beautiful, top notch brochure !!

In the section “Haircuts starting at” $13…..NO WAY, that certainly is a mistake. Groomers do just nails for more that that.




I thought she had all the services broke down into each individual service. For instance I thought if the bath was $30 then you add the haircut for $13 to get $43. If I am right then you might have to be more clear about that because you'd hate for clients to think they're going to only pay $13 for a grooming. I will have to agree that it's a beautiful brochure. Good job!

[Hello Kitty FTW]

these are from the 1st pdf:
......owntown Doggie is a professional home-based dog grooming salon serving the Greenville, Taylors and Greer, SC area<<<<< you need a S on the end of area

Because of the "the" at the beginning, area doesn't need to be pluralized. The cities are adjectives, otherwise it's just "The area."

On the second page:

"By using only top quality...." The sentence can be an easier read if you re-worded it like "Our clients notice the difference when we use top quality, earth-friendly PH balanced products!"

I don't think having the text surrounded by the * should be in the center of that page. I also notice you put * in certain spots where they probably aren't needed. It makes more sense to put that text in ( ) rather than *, because it's implying to look somewhere else for more detailed information.

Under Services: "Hair removal for breeds that require (it or this service inserted here).

Is "Because Shed Happens" a trademarked phrase from the FURminator company?

"Three options for completion pick up time" has an extra L in it after completion.

"Your pet is welcome to hong out with us & ploy" should be hang out with us and play. Loved upon sounds funny.

"Lost pickup time is 5:30" should be last.

It looks like a great brochure!

[july]

imo i would not list the bath and haircuts as a seperate thing just because someone could (and it does happen all the time) call and say they want "just a haircut" because i gave fido a bath at home so that will only be $15.00 according to your brochure i would say something like "a complete groom includes ..........." then you could offer just a bath service for .......$$$$$$ keep in mind that people will try to take advantage of this "just a bath thingie" i tell them when they call with a short coated dog and all they want is "just a bath" that i only do "j.a.b." for regularly maintained pets that come in at least once a month, example, when a lab is booked and they say they want jab i tell them what my price is AND what is covers (nails,ears,glands,bath,deshedding) they then realize it IS NOT j.a.b. and i have no problem with getting my prices i also prefer NOT to put any prices on my brochures just in case i need to change them out.

[downtowndog]

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Wow! Thanks so much for your taking the time to proof for me! I sure did make some errors that need correcting! Yes I meant for the haircut to be in addition to the bath, which having pointed out to me that people can missunderstand & take advantage, etc is a can of worms I do not want opened! Thanks again!